Mystery awaits those who seek,
don't leave hallowed land behind.
Moon becomes full, death reeks,
pass moors, the unknown you find.
Was death born by dark of night,
could legends and folklore remain?
We come to life with last breath,
as rain pours like blood in vain.
This unexplained phenomenon,
throughtout this land obscure.
On distant shores far beyond,
they seek blood of virgin pure.
Do not let the land beckon thee,
evil lurks beyond the sun set.
Beware night's feeding frenzy,
when blood runs red and wet.
Where death is met face to face,
winged creature, vampire bat.
Unbeknown, this strange place,
curiousity kills more then a cat.
Author notes
Based on contest prompt...
We are in Transylvania, and Transylvania is not England. Our ways are not your ways, and there shall be to you many strange things." Bram Stoker
A contest entry
- Apparitions by Titanium.
450 points, ended September 6, 2008, 5 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I dont know who you are, but the style is very much similar to mine, and not only am I intrigued, but influenced also by the line skills, using roughly, instead of my 10 or eleven syllable count, a seven of eight tempo which kind of suits this grand poem, I have toi say, this one will take some beating. Lovely work indeed, and I shall book mark this one. Well done!
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< Great Comment
Thank you for stopping by and reading and thank you for the advice. I have changed some and it sounds much better now. I appreciate your thoughts. You take care.
Sandy
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Bravo
I love this Sandy
You had me hooked from the beginning and held me till the end. I love the following...
"Do not let the land beckon thee,
evil lurks beyond the sun set.
Beware night's feeding frenzy,
when blood runs red and wet."
Wow! Simply awesome!
Great take on the prompt
Wish you the best in the contest
Take care
David
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Good Morning Dear David!!!!!!!!
Thank you so much my friend.
Your coments alwayts bring a warm smile. I always look forward to hearing from you. Hugs and Smiles. You take care.
Blessings,
Love ya, Sandy
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Superb
Ah, the legend. I think I've seen almost every vampire movie since the 40's at least. Very well written, imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. -
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Good Morning
So nice to get on here in the morning and see a nice comment from you. Thank you!!! You take care.
Sandy
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You are quite welcome.I shall; you also.
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This was a wonderful response to the prompt. You have included bits of the vampire legend but it is not a retelling of the original. I liked the repetition of wording with subtle shifts of meaning. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
. Rewarded 4
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Great Coment
Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate your nice comment. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Ah..very intriguing piece of poetry. You talent burst open with all your wonderful words. Excellent! Best to you in the contest.
Sam
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Thsnk You!!!!!
Always a pleasure when you stop by Sam. Have a wonderful and blessed day. You take care.
Always,
Sandy
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A wonderful interpretation. I really enjoyed this. Well done. Best of luck in the contest. Wonderful!
Be well
Slayer
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Dia dhuit
Hello Slayer, Thank you for reading and commenting. I am glad you enjoyed the poem. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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Nice take on the prompt. This flows easy and smooth, the reader picks up the pace to move through the intensity. Wonderfully dark for the reader to look closely into the dark.
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Hello Dan
I thank you for the nice comment. I don't write dark often but thought I would give it a try.. I appreciate your valued opinion dear friend.
You take care and have a nice day. Hugs
Blessings,
Sandy
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