I'm not much in favour of travel
when I do I can't figure out where,
if I do find a place that I fancy
just can't decide how to get there.
Not keen on a place that's too hot
I like somewhere cool and shady,
and I always thought travelling abroad
was examining some young lady.
If I go by air I get sea sick
by car I'd just drive off the rails,
in a boat I could miss all the tunnels
but by train you don't need any sails.
Walking would cut down on fuel
I'd ski but the water's too deep,
use a skateboard but I'm afraid of heights
I could swim but the slopes are too steep.
So I'm better off staying at home
to you this may sound insane,
but I'm English and like my holidays
just sitting in watching the rain.
A contest entry
- "precious and amusing and unutterably bizarre" by Polaja.
1050 points, ended September 24, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Laughter is the best medicine! by Anu-Nataraj.
550 points, ended November 8, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Winner takes all!!!!! by Kitch.
415 points, ended December 14, 2008, 29 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I am in the mood for a laugh. by TwiztidMaggot.
700 points, ended July 30, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme by XxNinjaNemoxX.
650 points, ended August 4, 55 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I found this rather amusing.
Congratulations and best of luck in my contest
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this is pretty funny. hah. I like how you wrote it. Congratulations on your silver trophy and your honorable mention. Thank you for your entry. Keep up your amazing work! Best of luck!
TwiztidMaggot -
i love this! Especially the way you've mixed up all the forms of travel. I found it funny, lighthearted and confusing all at once!
Oh nd thanks for saying English not British! people forget we are a seperate country.
great write and good luck in the contest!
kitch -
aww im too poor to appluad. :[
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So I'm better off staying at home
to you this may sound insane,
but I'm English and like my holidays
just sitting in watching the rain.
nice twist,,,i relly liked it...i don think its funny though..its more inclined towards creatively adorable =P !!!
but i loved it all the same !
good luck in the contest!
Anagha-Natara -
I really like the rhythm of this piece it certainly grew on me as a read further on - and I loved the ending the mixed-up travelling was wonderfully done - and I love the English reference at the end - it adds to the poem for me because one of my favorite nonsense book authors is English although I think you could have mentioned tea
well done!
Keep writing
Polly
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This was really amusing, I'm English too so I can IDENTIFY WITH THE RAIN. tHIS WAS A WELL THOUGHT OUT POEM, AND IT HAD A STRONG RHYTHM TOO THANKS AND GOOD LUCK
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This poem was pretty kool i really enjoyed the mixed up travelling problems though i think some people might say that you took the concept a bit too far. I do quite like the rhymes, though some seem a little bit simple, i actually think that added to the cuteness of this poem. I particularly liked the last two lines, really summed up the idea, and left a strong image of a man plainly refusing to leave his house. The title was completely appropriate.
Keep up the good work thanks for the entertaining read
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This is really cool. I love the abstract and weirdness of it. also, it was quite funny. Great Job!!!
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very great! made me laugh. true confusion here. but it adds alot to the piece great write and keep on penning!
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good luck in the contest, I liked the part about traveling abroad lol. the opposites really add to the feel, actually scratch that they make the whole feel of the poe
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I love the opposites that this poem posses. . .At first, I thought you had just made a mistake but I continued on. I really did enjoy your poem. It was a nice read at 6:22 in the morning.
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nice poem i enjoyed the read best of luck in the contest
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Very tender and cute!
Nice little rhymed poem in quatrains! I like this one -- it's kind of simple and refreshing! Travel is both fun and exciting -- you bring this out very well in your poem! The rhymes are nice but perhaps a bit forced in places. Without rhyming I find a poem is much easier to write and this freedom actually allows one to explore a subject / metaphor more deeply and thoroughly! Good job and keep writing your work shows real talent!
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Very funny. Did you mix up the fourth stanza on purpose? This poem sounds like someone visiting a travel agent--no idea where they want to go or when--"just something warm and sandy, not too far away, doesn't matter when...do you have anything available?"
Well, staying at home certainly is more economical.
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