Robin soldiers walk.
In formation in the yard
Claiming their booty.
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Robins sing to Dawn
They are first to greet the night
Robin red breasted
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Robins, wise birds all.
Seldom fooled by Cow Birds schemes.
Bad eggs rejected.
Author notes
Haiku, I hope
In a list
A contest entry
- KINGFISHER HAIKU by Swan song.
2600 points, ended September 5, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Pretty good. Well formed and good imagery
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The Robin is painted in your words
taking a moment to reflect in zennish thought the metaphoric robin.....soaking up the nature that is so well written within a haiku the depth and wisdom of nature. As for the structure usually 5-7-5 but like many poetic genres it is evolving moving away from strictness of the old. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for my moments of reflection.
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this is really good, im pretty sure they are all haikus, but i'm no expert.lol
good luck and take care
Stephanie ♥
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