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Beauty Kills

One boy
Five girls
Emily and Betty best friends forever
Lisa and Helen never got along
Sarah the social outcast.
Jolie managed to steal each heart
Emily was the first, they met over Pizza
Sarah was next; he met her crying by the steps
Lisa followed shortly with her with her love for ‘Linkin Park’
Helen was his favorite cheerleader
And Betty was a perfect ten… need I say more?
Jolie loved each one and but could not let go.
Emily and Betty never kept secrets but for some strange reason,
Jolie became a well-kept secret.
Lisa and Helen are beautiful arrogant girls
Who never believed they would date the same boy.
Sarah could not understand what Jolie liked about her
And she did not have any friends to talk to.
One day Jolie decided to end each relationship
He could not start lying to them anymore.
Emily swallowed 20 pills and downed a bottle of scotch;
Her parents were out on a romantic dinner
Sarah carved Jolie’s name into her wrist, and slashed
Her wrists several times, the pain blacked her out.
Betty filled her bath tub and took a never ending bubble bath,
Her parents broke open the door and found their dead daughter.
Lisa drove her car over a cliff on her way to the hospital,
Her mom had a severe heart attack and almost died. She wished she did.
Helen killed the baby inside her with a coat hanger
And she bled to death.
One boy
Five deaths.




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  • nevadapoet
    September 12, 2008

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    What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
    Nevadapoet


    • Koromone
      September 12, 2008
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      thank you so much im glad u liked it!!! xx


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    Wow sucha scary but entirely possible ending to a tragic story, very well done on this poem. best to you


  • Wolfdog silver member
    August 26, 2008

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    Excellent

    Wow, a very sad write indeed. Yet, I admired the imagery which you created, and it is well written. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • XcupcakesX
    August 26, 2008
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    oh wow this is really amazing. I love it. ^^


  • Nostalgic Moon
    August 26, 2008

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    oh my god.. this write is amazing,
    At the beginning I did not know how it would end but it ended up making me very very sad, I almost cried
    Good job, and best of luck in the contests.


  • Fallen-Phases
    August 25, 2008
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    wow, just wow.
    this is an awesome piece, and it left me sort of breathless
    excelllent job.
    -mlg

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