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smile pretty you sick f u c k

I'm, I'm burning up
And I, I keep throwing up
All these words that mean everything
But in the end, will they mean a thing?

At night, I swear I can hear you screaming
Screaming for something more
Oh baby, I'm screaming too
This isn't what we really asked for

Weed in one hand, a 40 in the other
My favorite way to ease the pain
As days and days pass
Everything remains the same

Your life, a disaster piece
You keep telling yourself you're through
To cure every single ache within you
Theres nothing I wouldn't do

You tell me lets just be friends
So we can't hurt each other
But f u c k, girl, don't you get
I want you like no other

I'm, I'm shaking up
And I, I keep breaking up
All these words you've said to me
Is this how it's really supposed to be?

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  • Deathless1
    December 3, 2008
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    the last part is the strongest it think.
    and i love the title!
    nice one.


  • xXbroken lullabyXx
    September 8, 2008

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    wow...i really like this..i'm sorry things aren't turning out better for you...anyways hope things get better..keep writing!


  • Changedtwice2many
    August 30, 2008
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    Very nice it reminds me of myself a while ago. great job


  • hindsight20-20
    August 25, 2008

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    Jesus Christ..I liked this.
    "weed in one hand and a 40 in the other" I can relate.

    For a while now I'm been drinking myself to sleep.
    but great poem.
    Please write more.


  • littleBritain
    August 25, 2008
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    i rally like this,
    well done!!!

  • She Stole My Voice
    August 25, 2008
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    I miss you're poetry D:
    I miss you too :[
    ♥ ♥


    -Mary


  • cherrylollypop
    August 25, 2008
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    this is amazing!


  • lovedxinxsighs
    August 25, 2008

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    I really likeded it.
    Great write since its been a while ^^
    I dont know exactly what it was about it, but I connected it. The words were just kinda there and I know it was amazing.
    Yay you!


  • just-alittle-emo
    August 25, 2008

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    Honestly I'd like to see this turn into a song. Not just the format you used but your wording as well made me feel more toward a song than any poem. Good job keep writing.


  • Chainsaw
    August 25, 2008

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    I really enjoyed this. It wasn't the most original piece or the most eloquent, but it was raw, easy to swallow and passionate. It rolls off the tongue nicely and keeps the reader's attention.

    Edgy, attention grabbing title, too. The slang and poor grammar in this piece reinforce the social ideas you express with references to drugs and feelings of hopelessness. It helps the reader to make various cultural assumptions that give depth to the narrator.

    I'm probably reading too far into this, though, since it's obviously autobiographical. Good work, nonetheless.

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