lethargy creeps silently
into hours of havoc
slowly seeping energy
from a mind too busy
to stop
eyes shut to night
but thoughts working
on tomorrows chores
exhaustion ticks
against a clock's echo,
counting minutes
til a new dawn
Author notes
Prompt: I want you to tell me how you feel right now...
A contest entry
- How does that make you feel? [options] by written-in-ink.
600 points, ended September 7, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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commenting again
exhaustion ticks
against a clock's echo,
counting minutes
til a new dawn
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loved that part so much
thank you so much
and good luck -
I can remember feeling this way when my children were small, still do when they come to visit with their children these days. I can recall my mind racing long after I had laid down to rest. You touched on a subject here that I am sure most mothers, wives, women period, can relate to. Excellent!
Renee
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very nice
and i get it!!
thank you and good luck -
wow this was really good!
i loved the first two lines
they had me captivated right from the start.
slowly seeping energy
from a mind too busy
to stop
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i really liked that part also
best of luck in the contest
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I know this is so true and you will be better soon I know it 
Love, C
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