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Breakfast's Ready

Then storms disappeared and lover's fall asleep
clouds soon reappears shadowing the moonlight
As distant sounds erupted, waking us from sleep
we embrace one another close awaiting sunlight.
As your  breathing soon steadies I snuggle close
watching shadows brighten, as the morning rose.

Whistles from far away, the start of another week
you begin to stir now as beans are being crushed
Bacon's cooking slow, through the door you peak
vision of me in white lace, to my side you rushed.
Lips are placed on my neck, hands upon my hips
squeezing tight, you pull me close into your grips.

Burner off, I'm turned on, pleasure on your face,
cover falls to the floor, passion now ignites you.
Clock on walls striking five, this is out of place,
both aroused, we carried on, another kiss or two.
Eyebrows rise within his eyes, passion is the key
on the floor the dishes flew, he's now having me.

Our shadows danced within the rooms four walls,
and our heart beats tap danced within our chest.
Streams of emotions carried us through the halls,
echoes of pleasure released, moans came to rest.
Whispers of "I love you", as clock chimed at six
"now off to work I must go", as he kissed my lips.

Author notes

A contest entry for:
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I was reading some Shakespeare, as you do, specifically Venus and Adonis and decided I loved one aspect of the form, the rhyme scheme. It shares a beautiful device with the Shakespearian (and Eusebian) Sonnet and the Ottava R

Yea yea...You knew I would try it.


Background credit: Ap hubby Griswold thank you hon!!

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  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Passionate and loving, rhymed and flowed as you do so well. Some wonderful imagery. Some of the couplets are quite stunning. Great stuff, a definite "Not Bad"!


  • Swan song gold member
    August 31, 2008
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    YES! Wow! see I am speechless lol you are a sensual wildfire!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    August 25, 2008

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    You are such a bad girl sometimes...lol
    This was really good...What a way to start the morning..
    Love you
    Nor


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 25, 2008
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    Lovely piece here

    Truly sensual and with such tenderness bravo


  • Swangrnv gold member
    August 25, 2008
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    very nice!

    Absolutely, wonderful morning breakfast!


  • wvtwinklestar gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Wow

    Very sensual..this poem has great expressions of the way mornings should begin..takes your breath away..Wink

    thanks,

    Conni'


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    August 25, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine romantic write. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • Griswold
    August 24, 2008

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    Beautifully done sweetheart. A wonderful way to start the morning, I like my bacon crisp anyways. And sunny side up buns work for me too. Love you baby...Scott


  • Volfeng
    August 24, 2008

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    This is marvelous, my love, very impressive, and romantic. I love you, good luck with the contest.

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