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How Dare Yoooooooou!

How could you leave?
We want you to stay!

Can you not see that we will grieve!
When you are away?

They will eat your pants?
Well I will eat your shrit!

AND I WILL FORCE YOU TO EAT DIRT!

...ok mabey not dirt
for that is a crime

But i do hope i have entered this poem in time

Please don't leave
Cause I will be sad

And wish that i have had...

Sent this lame poem sooner.

A contest entry

i know its not very good if you wanna give sugestions on how it could be better i would be greatfull

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  • SmartBrick
    August 25, 2008

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    This was NOT a lame poem like you thought!

    It really wasn't!I happened to like it!It gave a point, It followed the rules and it gave reasons why she should stay!Any poem that follows the rules is NOT(I repeat NOT) lame!