Grasping the earth
With two sweaty hands
Youthful, no boundaries
An explorer of lands
Nobody could touch me
I was the king of the west
The emperor of China
With a bulletproof vest
From the pyramids of egypt
To the haystacks in barns
I discovered them all
From inside my backyard
I could be a lawyer or dentist
Or a teacher and more
Anything I wanted
Of course that was before
Before school, before practice
Before tests and big cars
Before style, before vanity
Before injuries and scars
I look back and see nothing
But hopes and lost dreams
While my voice remains quiet
My head's drowning in screams
Two decades have passed
And I sit at my desk
With a pen in my right hand
And the globe in my left
Thinking, just thinking
That there once was a time
That anything was possible
'Cause that world was mine.
Author notes
This about sums up the way I feel right now.
A contest entry
- How does that make you feel? [options] by written-in-ink.
600 points, ended September 7, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Where are my strongest and weakest areas?
Comments
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I look back and see nothing
But hopes and lost dreams
While my voice remains quiet
My head's drowning in screams.
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i loved that stana
the rhyming was well done
and it was written beautifully.
i also really liked the first stanza
best of luck in the contest
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I loved it, especially the stanza that starts with before school....
Love D.L.
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This is really good. I adore longer poems that flow like this, and you did a great job with this one.
I was thinking in line 5, instead of saying nobody, no one might sound a bit better. It is just a suggestion, and other than that, I wouldnt change a thing about this poem. -
Wow, a great write you've got here! I love how the persona places himself/herself in shoes of different people- teasing the reader's mind, ya know?
The last two stanzas- touche, wonderful touch, indeed ^^
Not much to say here, this is definitely a great write; cheers
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