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[baby, come back]

tears streaming from my eyes;
[i swear they'll never stop]
sobs ripping from my broken heart,
and pieces falling to the ground;
/.shattering.one.by.one.\
the sound of broken glass,
vibrating my solid ear drums,
as my [fragile] ♥♥ breaks.
black lines running down my wet cheeks,
my hands :twisted: in my messy hair,
and my head thrown back on the pillow.
the beds bouncing up and
d.
  o.
    w.
      n.
as my body trembles uncontrollably.
crys of agony and pain scream from my mouth,
as i force my self to attempt to breathe;
[i promise im not okay]
just secretly whisper in my ear,
what makes her so much more than me?
i can't get these broken lyrics outta my mind,
baby why did you have to l.e.a.v.e?

"seems like a million years and i think i'm dying,
what do i have to do to make you see
she can't love you like me?"

if only you would feel it to,
love, it's so much more than real.
i know you l.o.v.e me too,
but what happened to the love we once shared?
baby please dont let it
s.
  l.
    i.
      d.
        e.
right out of your grasp.
hold it [tight] in your heart.
heres my shaking hand,
[i swear i'll help you hold on]
take this love outta my busted heart,
feel the way i do;
.please.im.begging.you.

just..
come back?

Author notes

i seen her girlfriend, well, i don't know what they are at the moment but they'll be back together. i swear i'm going crazy, if you could only see...

"Heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's the moment in life when you actually feel alive"


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  • CatQueen248
    September 7, 2008

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    From the bottom up the 14th line you might want to change "to" to the correct "too." Besides that this was an amazing poem. So many feeling, so much pain, and heartache. I've been there. I hope things get better for you. If you ask me the person you are in love with is going for another and can't see how great you are then you deserve someone so much better. Don't worry you'll find someone who's actually worthy of your love. Congrats on gold.


  • Hope Angel silver member
    September 2, 2008

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    Aww sissy. I'm sorry that this is happening.. s you really tight. I love you lots.

    You write really well in this form, you are getting really good. Good luck in the contest.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Awww Sweety I am sorry I wish I could take all your pain away because I would in a heartbeat I love you loads hang in there

    • my.stars.dont.shine
      August 25, 2008
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      thanks. and i wish i wouldn't care more about her happiness then my own because then i would have never met her girlfriend. but as long as she's happy, a small little part of my heart is happy too. *sigh* and it did mean a lot to her for me to do it. i just wish it wouldnt.. hurt so unbearingly bad.

      thanks. im trying. i love you loads too.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 25, 2008
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    Aww.. the sound of a breaking heart is hard to hear! Sorry you're going through this! Expressed very well here!!



  • Number 13
    August 24, 2008
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    hrm =/

    on a plus side your writing is amazing
    and is growing as you are :]

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