this is no poem
because poetry would never imply poetry
or rhyme so uselessly
it tells me,
“I want to be a fleeting three dimensional feeling-
a trillion blood cells searching for someplace other than a heart”
I ignore it because
behind the lovely is just some pretty
and tucked between-
a mad thought is pulling pieces of itself
from obscurity
and all of it makes little sense
still, I try to write sense into a poem
but it spites me
by convincing me to mistake
what I wanted
to say in the beginning
Author notes
I'm not so sure about this one. Bah, I can always delete it. Why do adverbs have to rhyme with poetry/me?
A contest entry
- hypocrite by the atlantic.
2300 points, ended September 3, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is it overkill and therefore crap?
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No, I don't think it's crap at all and does not deem for deleting
A good thought provoking piece that's witty but sincere at the same time. I just liked the whole tone of the piece. Thanks for entering; definitely unique 
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Thanks! Man, this "poem" still bothers me. One day, I might rewrite this into a real poem, not so blatant/harsh, rhyme-y, or abstractly narrated.
you know, in typing this reply, I finally put my finger on why this bothers me. ha! I guess I owe you another thank you for that!
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