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snow stained red through dicontent

I sit alone everyday
because i have nothing to say
to him or her
her or him
I don't know any of them

So i sit alone
here or there
i don't want to laugh or sing
i don't need to learn anything
proud as a papa and stubborn as a mule
i never really got school
so i sit alone

Author notes

i just started going to a new school and i'm not adjusting well

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  • grapefruite
    September 5, 2008

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    Not so much. The first stanza is good though, and the second is allright. There's just something that's not there. (Just because I say this doesn't mean that I think my poems don't have the same problem, but you asked me what I thought.)