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Mirage

 

 

 

 

 

 

Wrapped up in memories

exhausted and burning

in the desert of your heart

looking for salvation

only to find a mirage

just another door locked

by your selfish heart

 

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Prompt: Picture
20-30 Words

A contest entry

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  • Ms. Black Eyeliner
    September 4, 2008

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    "looking for salvation

    only to find a mirage" i love this line it perfectly represents frustration and saddness you have with this insatiable need

    "just another door locked

    by your selfish heart" i love this line too great job


  • Elisabeth Strange
    August 27, 2008
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    Grats on your gold, dear!


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    August 25, 2008

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    Oooh, that last line just cuts like a knife!
    "only to find a mirage
    just another door locked
    by your selfish heart"

    I like this one a lot!

    Amber


    • Jeremy0826 silver member
      August 26, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the Gold in your contest Amber!
      I appreciate it and am glad that you enjoyed it!



      Jeremy0826


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    Yes indeed speak it honey.
    This says alot.
    Speaks of many actually
    and we dont see it til its gone.
    Wonderful job on prompt.

    Best wishes in the contest

    Love
    Passions

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