Burnt me to the bone
And skin and
the skeletal remains
are all that i can hope to be
i love you
but i don't know how
and everytime i try to get away
my world comes crashing down
sweetheart
please don't leave me here
let me stay in your arms
your hands in my pockets
deep in my jeans
when you kiss me
the world is covered in bubblewrap
the rubble crackling just a far away echo
our world is too much
i love you but i don't know HOW!!!
Help me?
Keep me
As long as you'd like
Author notes
just something I wrote my first day of art school... it's honestly not cohesive at all and I'm really not sure what went into it
A contest entry
- rawr I want good love poetry!!!! by Live with a passion.
600 points, ended November 15, 2008, 79 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Wearing my ♥ on your sleeve by WithinYourEyes.
400 points, ended February 19, 22 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Wierdly for me, I like this poem. I rarely go for work that doesn't rhyme, but for me it doesn't need to! Considering that this is me... I mean that down there...
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I really like this! I love the image you created of the love these two had. And the bit about the bubblewrap was genius. good luck!
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when you kiss me
the world is covered in bubblewrap
the rubble crackling just a far away echo
i really like these lines because in the midst of drama you randomly mention bubble wrap to go along with the poem and i love it! -
Aww this is cute. I like it! Good luck :]
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I like that its not fully formed - not that it looks unfinished, just raw and off the bat. Lovely. I like this new style.
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