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Oh But Oh But Oh!

Find a box, some dirty rags,
kiss up to the homeless hags.
Steal a cup with lots of pens,
hide your change wher'er you can.
Wear a patch over one eye,
oggle women that walk by.
Hang out at the bon-fire barrel,
share the story of your peril.
Buy a suit with all your change,
get a job and don't act strange.

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  • dustookie2
    September 5, 2008

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    This will be the third time I have posted my comment on this poem tonight.......A great take on the prompt. A collaboration as well Thank you both for the Good luck in the contest.....hope yours is much better than mine tonight


  • Roaddog Wolf
    September 4, 2008

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    LMAO

    gee wonder where you got the wearing a patch over your eye idea, lol . good write


    thanks for entering the contest and good luck
    ...


    • echo-ink
      September 4, 2008
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      Thanks, Roaddog Wolf, YAY! glad you liked it, your contest was a riot, lol
      Bell, xx


  • PerVirtuous
    August 25, 2008
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    Great take on the prompt. Should do well in the contest.


  • Solidified
    August 24, 2008

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    I like the rugrats cartoon background, I haven't seen that in too many years now. Interesting poem, I didn't find it all that humorous but I'm uptight and don't get off on laughing at homeless people- that's just me- I'm sure that other people who are way cooler and more laid back than I am will find this funny. In fact, I think I've read it wrong and have mistaken your intentions. Either way, I do like the rhythm and swiftness of this read, you also made vivid images with your words. Nicely done.

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