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Blood Red

Dedicated to those who like to look back!

(16 line version)



I died last week,
Ended it all,
The end didn't stall,
Came to have a peek..

Peek at life through the veil,
Many cried,
Some tried,
I do look pale!

Hair blood red,
Blood on my tombstone.
I don't condone,
Being murdered!

Knew he would strike,
If I ryled him some,
Now I'm numb,
Was impaled on a spike!





Copyright:K:August 2008

Author notes

Wrote a 16 line version and a 12 line version didn't know which to submit as it said 10 lines give or take a few. But here is the 12 line version anyway:
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Blood Red
Dedicated to those who like to look back!

(12 line version)

I died last week,
Ended it all,
The end didn't stall,
Came to have a peek..

Peek at life through the veil,
Many cried,
Some tried,
I do look pale!

Hair blood red,
Blood on my tombstone,
I don't condone,
Being murdered!

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Allpoetry.com Contest
August 2008
Contest PIF Pic prompt :Because I feel the need for another
contest by Rclane
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2418853
15 entries
No essays please
10 lines give or take a few
Normal rules apply
Let your muse take you wherever
Be creative
Enter this contest
* This is an anonymous contest - your name will be
hidden from editors
* Closes in 13 days, or after 11 more entries
* Rewards - Gold: 300, Silver: 100, Bronze: 75,
Honorable mention: 1 people
* Prewritten poems are not allowed.
* Enter a new poem

Picture Depicts:
Girl in black dress with red hair sitting
thinking whilst leaning against tombstone thinking,
tombstone has blood on it.

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  • cre8tiv-writer
    September 4, 2008
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    Awesome blend of photos and vivid imagery!!! This is a work of art!!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 29, 2008
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    Oh my goodness

    This was totally wicked and the pics so scary indeed goot take on the contest and good luck


    • Kazytc silver member
      August 30, 2008
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      Thanks millions!

      Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Hope you win gold in every contest you enter, you well deserve to!
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc XX


  • Rclane gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    Oh! dark twist on prompt. Nicely done. 16 lines would have been ok but the cut is good also. I get sleepy when they go into 37 lines Thank you for your entry and best of luck to you.

    • Kazytc silver member
      August 30, 2008
      Edit | Reply

      Thanks millions!

      Thanks millions, for your fab and kind review you are very inspiring and encouraging.
      Glad you liked it.
      Hope you win gold in every contest you enter, you well deserve to!
      Poetic Hugs and Thanks Millions,
      Kaz.
      Kazytc XX

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