A ribbon of moonlight,
a pair of young lovers
alone in a garden
in a haze of its light,
She was lovely as spring,
of bearing and beauty,
Young Lancelot loved her
and the lady loved him.
Forbidden, uncertain,
as warm lips were sealing,
their sighs were revealing
such a tenuous plight,
Of a Queen and a knight.
He kissed pearl white shoulders,
and taught bosom’s rising
as perfume from blossoms
bewitched the night air.
Her blue eyes were misting
he tremblingly told her,
‘tonight is forever,’
then un-loosed her gold hair.
They clung close together
forever, forever,
her lips gave the answer
as he laid her thighs bare.
So warm and so tender,
in total surrender
alone in the garden,
they sealed the great burden
and were void of all care.’
With news of deception
King Arthur was broken,
with outraged unreason
made a frenzied sojourn.
He sent a base token,
‘The vow she had broken
(not open to favour,)
was his people’s concern.’
Then signed the vile order,
dispatched it with fervour,
the parchment claimed - Treason.-
For that she could burn,
A contest entry
- Open to Allpoetry #129 Poems on Arthurian Legend by Lyndon.
6000 points, ended November 7, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sensual and romantic, delightfully soft telling of a tale of King Arthur's court.
Thanks for the entry
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Bandit appreciation!
Thank you for this fine contribution to The Poetic Bandits reading list
~Lilac
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Hoo boy!
...Feel the steam rising here alright!
Sensuous the judge asked for and sensuous he/she got!
Very goooood.
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This is a wonderful piece of poetry! I really love the fourth stanza the best - it had a hurried kind of forbidden feel to it that was delicious! The last line I thought should have a full stop instead of a comma - and that was the only thing that I thought to change
wonderful!
Keep writing
Polly
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A tastefully written sensual tale, well developed with good flow and emotional tone.
Dennis
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Well Done
I rather enjoyed this peice, I think it relates the tell of guinevere and lancelot quite well. I love that you found a way to make it ryhme without forcing it, wich is alway the problem when I ryhme.
May the moon guard you.
DW
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I really enjoyed the romanticism of this piece and the sensual language. This flowed well and I thank you for sharing this
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So sensual and with the spice of history! Thanks for the entry and best of luck!
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Very well written! and a great story of passion, and sin, and the price one might have to pay for it. A much enjoyable read...
Love & light
Debbera
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wow
This is very good. I enjoy reading this. Such a depth poem. -
Very Sensual
Ah yes, more of our knight here! lol. Great!.
The fourth stanza, in particular, is very sensual. I like how you have created a passionate piece and placed it in the context of a kind of story. You have really made this scene soft and arousing. You can sense the desire between the two charaters and the emotions of sacrificing in love's forbidden act.
Extremely well done...Good luck in the contest...alby
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Humm..you crafted the story of the hearts here brining the destiney unrevealed.....I love it..you did well in this verse..
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