I was just something for his
spare time and spare change
He won't break a sweat
[he'll only break my heart.]
The princess of a toad, in my stomach
did a cartwheel and puckered her lips;
and all I really wanted,
was him to miss me
Author notes
I wish I understood why I feel like this;
http://media.photobucket.com/image/love/mirandabri08/__-.jpg?o=34
Ignorance is bliss; this is all a little backwards. I'm in a cynical mood. Sorry if it's not what you wanted
A contest entry
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900 points, ended August 28, 2008, 9 entries
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this is really good!!
the imagery is beautiful
i loved the brackets a lot. they added a lot to this piece.
I was just something for his
spare time and spare change
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i can really relate to those lines at the moment.
best of luck in the contest
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Why is it girly I always relate to your poems? Short and sweet and sad. This was very fufilling. Brava! Jane
Fave lines:
He won't break a sweat
[he'll only break my heart.]
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glad you liked it lovely.
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so, i love this.
"He won't break a sweat
[he'll only break my heart.]
The princess of a toad, in my stomach
did a cartwheel and puckered her lips;"
blah! i miss you!
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The princess of a toad, in my stomach
did a cartwheel and puckered her lips;
and all I really wanted,
was him to miss me
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very nice endding
im fond of the ones that
stick with you
i think the only thing that i didnt like was
[speaking of change--he never did.]
but the rest of it was very nice
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i took out the line you didn't like
i agree with you
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