You’re stealing all my petals,
so my flower's almost bare.
Acting like it matters not,
like you don’t even care.
When I end up as just a stem,
you’ll wonder where I went.
The gift I gave you; dearest friend,
you know was heaven sent.
While I'm wilting you’re running around,
your water's giving life.
To every plant whose petals bloom,
you cut me like a knife.
Almost gone; I’m drooping low,
and now on the ground I lay.
When I’m gone and your heart is bare,
gone’s where I’m going to stay.
Author notes
Prompt #1 Sadness and anger over unfaithful love, full of lies and deciet. Feeling left for dead and uncared for. Betrayed. (Bosiarbooger) art 47dce8964cca0444- devientart.com
A contest entry
- Write What You Will! by limechic.
725 points, ended September 1, 2008, 62 entries
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Love this! I like the way you used the petals as the love! great!!!!
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Love the imagery in this one...how someone just tears you apart, piece by piece, petal by petal. I noticed a couple of grammatical errors, but great rhyming!
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I hate to leave errors in a poem. I have gone over it three times with spell and grammer check and am lost, a tip may help me perfect this write your help would be appreciated
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Sure thing
1st stanza, 2nd line: flowers should be flower's
3rd stanza, 1st line: I should be I'm
3rd stanza, 2nd line: waters should be water's
great job though!
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Thank you while I'm writing I know what I want to say it just doesn't always make it to paper that way. My concentration is terrible. Thank you again, Boog
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