"Best friends forever,"
as lips touch with teenage passion.
"I'll never love another"
as two hearts sync their beating.
"Take my hand til the end of time"
as fingers trace outlines of autumn freckles.
"I'll stay yours, if you stay mine"
as promises escape broken baracades.
"I will never let you down"
"I will never let you go"
A contest entry
- reserve! by written-in-ink.
900 points, ended August 28, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If I messed anything up I'm sorry and please point it out.
Comments
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This is lovely!!!! It brings back memories of those wonderful years, when life was so uncomplicated and pure! I married my first love when in high school and never regretted that for a moment... Though death parted us many years ago, he will always be my life long love....
Thank you for this trip down memory lane!!!!!
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aww this was so cute!
i loved it
the imagery was beautiful
and i really liked the way you did a line in quotes followed by an explanation filled with amazing imagery.
that was really well written
best of luck in the contest
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The ending was beyond powerful, but my favorite line was this:
""I'll stay yours, if you stay mine""
Amazing.
I love the way you write.
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i like this a lot
a very nice take on the pic
good luck!!!
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