Fighting these demons
restricting my freedom,
clawing my memories
in shadows of pain.
Forgive me my sins.
Release me from torture.
Guilt consumes me
I'm bound by this chain.
Author notes
20-30 words: Pic prompt.
A contest entry
- PIF/QUICKIE - picture prompt by Map of Stars.
490 points, ended August 25, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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powerfully full of so much darkness in every single word, though it is short, i liked it.
favorite part:
Guilt consumes me
I'm bound by this chain.
it's soo expressive
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Amazing, I like what you've created here! This write fits well with the picture, and I love the rhyme in the first two lines, not sure if that was intentional or not as there were no other rhymes, but it was a great opener
"Guilt consumes me, I'm bound by this chain" Very nice!
Amber
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What a powerful write my dear. Memories, they comfort, they hurt, they bind, they teach us... They have a place within our hearts, and souls, that we find ourselves looking in at them often sometimes, and other times, we have to try to look past them to carry on.
You did a great job on this one!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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I can relate to this, sometimes guilt does bind. Very nicely done!
xoxo
KJ
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This was really dark, yes memories bind us in ways we seem to think there is no freedom..ah but there is.
Great write
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nice take on the prompt, the first stanza is quite powerful.
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