Immersed in thoughts,
like tidal waves:
billowing, foaming, crashing landward,
a freight train, a tsunami ...
thinking torrid, turgid thoughts,
tensing,
torrentially ...
togetherness
times ten ... ten ... at ... ten ... tion ...
epitome of collective, cosmic consciousness,
submerged, drowning
in air ...
intoxicated on oxygen
and trace gases,
floating in an ether of static ...
and music ...
ubiquitous ululations ...
overload ...
correspondence ...
co ... re ... spond ... dance ...
relationships so fluid and flaccid, flowing ...
nothing remains but spots and stains,
strained through a sieve,
soaking slowly
skyward ...
like all things
lighter
than
air ...
What did you think?
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Like all things Ginsberg...
This poem is a masterpiece!! 
All the critical thought I can imagine here is that the background made it very difficult to read. Otherwise, this is brilliant work!! 
Thank you for sharing your muse's talents with all of us!! Peace always, xx Cyn 
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like all things
lighter
than
air ...
This was such marvelous fun to read! I am a bit of a fan when it comes to any form that zig-zags around like a bumblebee searching for buds, lol. It was a delight to read a piece that didn't just express itself, but actually danced and reveled in its freedom.
Loved it!
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I'm not entirely convinced you aren't a brain in a vat somewhere assigned to the task of learning, absorbing, and processing the fragments of a fractured world with the awe of a child. There is a science fiction bent to your writing and I think its amazing. Even more amazing might be that it isn't so much fiction as it is an exploration of that part of reality we call "possibility." You guys totally had it in the 60's. I'm glad there are some left that aren't burnouts, or yuppies, or whatever. Your writing is STILL filled with hope.
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The brain in a vat thing was intended to be a compliment. I just now thought of the implications of that statement. A brain in a vat needn't be malevolent. Sometimes certain people travel in different bodies, that's all.
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D'accord ...
I got it.
Mille fois merci.
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Hoodwinked !
This poem is so vivid in imagery and the alliteration is wonderful! Wonderful food for thought, enough to make a sumptious meal from. Thanks for the mental stimulation.
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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Oh, this is a wonderful write! Your words picked me up and flew me, as if I were a kite, glorying in the air, revelling in wings. I know you wrote of water, but I danced in air. Thank you.
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i read the last stanza aloud about five times, after the whole. More later.
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Reading this, one senses a "lighter than air" feeling of exuberation of the muse' in full throttle action of inspired writing.
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i think your exellace and talent shines...much more above my simplicity...this poem floats
mal
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I think ...
that you are just an extremely nice person, as well as being much too kind.
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This is beautiful. I love the allteration, the words, the play... I don't know what wins but you're a winner bro. Write on.
Dez
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This describes the passionate hyperbole of the poet's heart and soul so well! Nice decriptive piece.
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No chance of a trophy here ...
but at least I finally wrote something. I've had massive writer's block for weeks now.
Thanks for the kind words in any case.
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