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Lost in Time

Clocks circle the dark abyss that surrounds me.
The angel like wings flap soundless in the vacuum of space.

No way to measure the distance of anything, just darkness.

I watch in the center of it all as the wings shatter into thousands of pieces.

The clocks slowly fall and as the last one begins it's descend, it begins to drag me down.

The pace quicken and the fall was like free falling out of a plane.

I begin to scream, but no sound is heard.

The power increases and I feel me body ripping in all directions.

The pain neverending until I hit the ground and feel no pain.

A hallway streches in front of me, the clocks have disappeared.

There was a golden door at the end of the hall.

I walk down, but everytime I reach for the golden handle, the room expands

and the door runs away harboring a secret.

Doors open some sucking me in to them.

I caught glimpses of pain,

Dreams not fulfilled,

Goals not acheived,

Life destroyed,

Light unatainable.

I carry on to the door, the only source of hope.

But as it grows farther apart, it begins to slip away.

I jog, I run, I sprint.

Still the door carrys on teasing.

I was lost in time,

With no way out.

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  • faithwhisperer silver member
    September 27, 2008

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    I like your imagery and words you've chosen here. Very thought provoking. I think one suggestion I might make is think about the pacing of your poem. For example, keep your lines about the same measure as it makes them easier to read. I see a few places I would probably break your poem at the comma and take it to the next line.

    In your first two lines, I would suggest breaking it, say for example, " The angel-like wings,
    flap soundless
    in the vacuum of space.

    Etc...try and see if it works for you! faith

  • The Rainbows Mind
    September 10, 2008
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    This poem contains interesting metaphor and descriptive imagery.
    Thanks for entering.

  • mjm1495
    September 2, 2008
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    I'm moving on, and leaving this dark cloud behind me. With a prewrite I didn't know how to add that sorry.

  • limechic
    August 24, 2008

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    I hate dreams like that...something so close and yet so far...it's so frustrating!

    Great job, good luck in the contest!