What did you do
when he came back from the pond
with a leopard frog
and tadpoles in a jar?
Did you wake Grandfather
by shaking his arm,
did mother come to the door
wringing her hands on a rag--
he seemed reluctant to give them up,
are you still certain that he loved you,
now that you drive through
parking lots
that hot innocence lost to complications,
numbers
and a son who has mistaken a lover for the first
time?
In a list
Please tell me what you think
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Vivid imagery in the first two stanzas of a young boy doing what young boys often do and being met with disapproval.
"Mistaken a lover for the first time" I like that phrase.
An original write. We have come to expect that from you.
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Oh. And also, this poem is an example of how simple words and thoughts pulled into powerful images can communicate complex thoughts.
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And a mother must untie the umbilical cord sooner or later but the ties that bind are never fully severed when a child comes home to mourn the passing of innocence or the loss of love.
C
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No. That Boy didn't know about Love. Except maybe his grade school teacher who swished past his desk -- her stockings and garters blaring in his mind from under her skirt.
Girls, you see, well some of them, they Know these things. Even then, it takes a really long time sometimes for the ribbons of time to find the two and tie them together -- the Boy must go on his Odysseus journey and the Girl must try out all her costumes.
This poem has such precise images -- Stanza 1 and 2. And some great sounds especially in:
parking lots
the hot innocence lost to complication
I thought maybe the second lost could be rethought but maybe not. Toybox poem. Yup.
Lisa
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