Mouth,
an invention of God, a weapon to some.
Fires like a cannon, non-stop.
Silent killer.
Mouth,
an invention of God, a speaker to all.
Communicated with words,languages.
Without it, the world will be in total confusion, total chaos.
Needed for all.
Mouth,
an invention of God, a healer to all
Works well with a listening ear, a sad heart.
Heals the wounds, stitched the scars, with just some comforting words.
A magical doctor.
Mouth,
an invention of God, a sweet talker to some.
Sweet as honey, sticks as candy, with an unknown motive.
It may be telling a lie, it may be telling the truth.
An unsolved mystery.
Mouth,
an invention of God, a step to war.
With just one word, the lives will change.
Killing and slaughter, crying and tears.
War is indeed fierce.
Mouth,
an invention of God, a thing to control.
Mind over body, not body over mind.
What you want his invention to become, the decision lies with you.
You are the mastermind.
A contest entry
- Body Parts by Nicole Hanna.
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very interesting piece I like the use of religion and sincerity and kindness from people using their mouth
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Mouth,
an invention of God, a speaker to all.
Communicated with words,languages.
Without it, the world will be in total confusion, total chaos.
Needed for all.
Sometimes with it the world is in total confusing what comes out can sometime be so twisted its becomes difficult to untwist...just a thought
Mouth,
an invention of God, a sweet talker to some.
Sweet as honey, sticks as candy, with an unknown motive.
It may be telling a lie, it may be telling the truth.
An unsolved mystery.
-These few lies touch me maybe because I have become a victim to these words of candy so sweetly drips from ones mouth like honey from a comb..this i can relate to
Mouth,
an invention of God, a step to war.
With just one word, the lives will change.
Killing and slaughter, crying and tears.
War is indeed fierce.
Indeed sometimes ones spills words like oil into the sea...
-A few words out of the mouth and kill a sea of love Between two...
Mouth,
an invention of God, a thing to control.
Mind over body, not body over mind.
What you want his invention to become, the decision lies with you.
You are the mastermind.
Very True....you are the master to what flows like a river from if ....good or bad...the goal is to keep it truthful and maintain this ability for many yeras to come....To this Day I havent found that person that has the ability...
I really enjoyed reading this touched me and made me think...thank you
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WoW I never realize the mouth
was used for so many things.
This was great.
Best of luck in the contest.
Justgot2loveme
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Wonderful imagery and emotion that grabs the reader!
A beautiful piece of poetry you have expressed well with the repitition and profound insight!
My best to you in this contest!
Linda
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This leaves me stunned & speachless. Fantastic work, priceless. I read some of your profile & added you as a favorite, and as a 13 year old your writing is extremely advanced. Fantastic work, keep it up darling!
-JM<3
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wow, this is really creative, and I like the way it goes together. It flows really well!! great job on this, you did a really good job!!
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hahas, i wish people would stop asking that cos i AM 13! Lols, thanks for your comment anyways
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wow are you sure you are 13 this is work of a grown person very nice write i loved it keep it up you write like a pro...
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Okay, i swear im 13, hahas. Seriously, i AM 13. Nahh, there's lots of other 13 year olds that write much better den i do thanks for your comment anyways
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Ok, I swear you're lying.
Ok, I swear you're lying.
'Cause you certainly don't write like a 13 year old. You write far, far, far better than any 13 I know. Seriously.
Anywayyyy,
I like it. Lots&lots&.
First stanza, fourth stanza, fifth stanza, are all brilliant. The second and the third sound a little forced, and makes the rest of the piece seem dragged out.
The sixth stanza is in a class of it's own though.
Love the ending.
Keep writing, I'd love to hear more from you!
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Though I can appreciate the poetic purpose of the repetition, it didn't read very well to me. Of course, that might be my own preferences at play, but it slowed the poem down, and cheapened what the individual stanzas were saying. Perhaps I'm not diggin' the discussion of the body part as the result of some external (or internal if you're particularly religious- since I'm not, it feels external) relationship with a creator. This is more a dialogue about what the mouth does or doesn't do, instead of simply about the mouth itself. Thanks for entering. I know the idea behind the contest might seem vague
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