I wonder-
when the day would come;
I’d see you--
and if my heart
would hasten,
or would it sink?
it’s been a long time,
between those
endless summer’s
…carefree
and oh how;
I would watch you,
walklng down
the sanded slopes
to ocean’s edge…
wading ankle deep,
hair blowing
to a salted breeze
you’d look back at me,
I’d smile…
and in this way,
we once were
could we, …still be
Author notes
idle thoughts
A contest entry
- A Patron Favorite PIF by onerios13.
10000 points, ended December 4, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Damned good ...
for idle thoughts.
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Well done, very visual and, I think, universal. Perfect ending too.
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and in this way,
we once were
could we, …still be
It's rare to find such a succient piece that carries such incredible longing, yet this poem somehow miracles it into being with its poignant actions and rich emotional nuances. I found it spells out exactly what a haunting moment should be: something that is never forced, but always questioning.
Lovely.
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excellent~
Sad but once again penned beautiful...
Idle thoughts??? Would hate to see you really thinking
Best of luck in the contest
Looks like a winner in my book
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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Beautifully sad and full of longing for what was and what could be.
- jo -
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took my heart...ran with it.
this poem gave me a lump in
my throat. love, lane
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very sad
but we are always able to create new ones
absolutely beautiful write my friend.
a pleasure to read
good luck in the contest.
God bless...
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So beautifully heartfelt, hon. *sighs*
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Sometimes the idle thoughts we have, take us back to a time we left in the shadows and it opens old wounds. This reminded me of some good, but sad times. Very well written.
Sam
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oh this one touched my heart, but you are always writing such rewarding tidbids or ones like this that makes the ladies tear eyed, good luck in the contest
Linda
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