Lucid dreams pervade the night
like thunderstorms through silver rain.
Hushed winds suppress the fright
while gentle petals' blooms regain.
Awake in bliss or dreadful screams-
lucid dreams pervade the night.
Like crystal water's cryptic streams,
they drift within dark sunlight.
As sleepless film shades your sight,
silver dawn creeps through the prairies.
Lucid dreams pervade the night
like silent doves croon hymns softly.
And as silken fog covers land
like blankets through cold's harsh bite,
midnight's darkness in vanished sands;
lucid dreams pervade the night...
Author notes
Quatern. Thought I'd give it a shot. :] Took me forever to write lol
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Quatern - Prompt - Spirit by Little Eagle.
600 points, ended September 14, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank you for your entry
Excellent try. It is good to challenge ourselves and try something new. Dreams, you are the second person to write about dreams. They lend themselves nicely to spirit. As I have said Native Americans believe that they have visions in dream time. Many Christians have been visited in their dreams by the spirit of the Lord.
The form was done well. Though the syllable count was to be 8 all the way through, you made it uniform with a little twist by making every other line one syllable short. Which really worked. Also your refrain line was quite good and worked well through out the poem. I appreciate that you chose to rhyme as well, which I feel added nicely to the flow and rhythm of the poem. Well done over all.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
The refrain line is soft and liquid and provides a nice message in each stanza. Lucid dreams, either pleasant or terrifying, help us work out questions that dwell in our subconscious. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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Love your use of language in this write. Lovely flow.
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