Twinkle, twinkle in your eye:
How it dares make me smile,
Make me laugh, make me yours.
The dark shine shames the cosmos,
Stuns the heavens, sets me free.
The night sky bows at your glance,
Stutters at a peek, turns in disgrace.
The radiant gaze gives the ladies chills,
Gives the men spite, gives me joy.
The sweet dreams tell me to take the sparkle,
Wear it on my finger, cherish you always.
Your glimmering eye, oh, those eyes,
Will eternally possess my soul.
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So true and sweet. Dreams about the perfect guy, the price charming you've always imagined. You think "he's the one" when you're with him and when you're not. He has the power to make you smile when no one else can, and to make you laugh at the dumbest of jokes. I loved the title, it fits perfectly. Your wording was beautiful and your imagery was astounding. I think almost every girl can relate to this one.
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Thanks for entering Power of a Prince in this contest, EternalComplication. I appreciate it.
I like what you were doing with twinkle/shine/sparkle/radiant/glimmering and bringing it down to dreams telling you to wear it on your finger. I'll be interested in seeing more from you. -
WOW!
I deffinately wish i had a love like that, this is amazing! great jobb, well done
AbbyxGrace
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I would love to be in love like that.
...take the sparkle,
wear it on my finger...
Love taht bit. I don't know why. It's beautiful.
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a lovely poem i like the presentation of the thoughts, it has an simle yet rhythmic flow
excellent poem
--mlg
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Um idk...hmmm?
its very well written and sweet but when i read i like to have a bit of a view on the persons thoughts so i guess i dont know u well enough to see into your mnd yet...but it really is a great write...Keep it up!-perhaps your more complex that i could have ever possibly imagined
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