fairies in the trees
oh how they play
what they do
I can never say
one I've tried to capture
but it just got away
dancing in the trees
from light they stay away
doing as the please
what they do
is hard to say
I tried to capture one today
in my hand it did land
and my eyes were pleased
through a trick of light
and the shadow of night
it flew far away
Author notes
I don't think I'm finished it yet, but maybe someone could help me finish or get a better flow to it?
criticism?
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I have seen them through a trick of light like you describe and sometimes swarms of insects look awfully convincing... fun little piece here.
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yes, ?I wrote it more for fun than anything, some of the lines are too long so it makes the flow off, but hey-I'm not perfect. I wrote a poem called the flower fairies for a contest and it is much better
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I like the picture prompt!
I like the poem. In its simplicity is its magic. A childlike wonder adds to the poem and makes it more concrete. Thanks for the share.
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How magical this little piece is, I think you did extremely well and your words fit the picture beautifully. Well done and keep writing! I loved this piece.
Shaz xx
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