Oh I wish I could just break away.
I wish my parents didn't fight.
I wish the soldiers overseas would just come home today.
Lord keep them safe.
I wish my parents didn't scare me,
I wish my mom and dad would talk to me.
When I get scared I'll pray to the one above.
I know it will be hard to say good bye,
but I got to make a life before I die.
I want to love my parents.
I do but sometimes they make me mad.
When my parents fight I will pray.
I wish I could have another friend.
People these days don't see me as I really am they see only the outside.
The friends I had saw who I am.
We can see the world change,
though we do not change with the world.
I wish I didn't have to tell my friends my family problems.
I will never forget the people I love.
I'll remember you in my prayers tonight.
Life goes on. Oh help me Lord.
Author notes
I wrote this a few years ago but my parents don't know a thing about poetry so I'm asking for your help now.
Please tell me what you think
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AWWWWWWWWW!
hehe this is amazing && srry i made ur dog bark
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direct from the soul! opening the window of heart for a while and let these words escape did you? well they are deep and sad! Full of emotions and full of frustration may also add the sea of over-whelming emotions! I loved the piece really! It was awesome, wonderful, fantastic and tragic! Felt it really!
"Lord keep them safe.","Life goes on. Oh help me Lord."
lovely lines means praying God adds strength to the poem!
I really can't tell u how I feel but your poem is nice and I feel that the writer is soft, sensitive and emotional really! A very cute persone!
Have all my Good Lucks and Best Wishes!
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you write what comes from the heart, you only a babe yet but so much emotion and such raw feelings,why? those you love are there for you, an that includes your mum and dad (although it might not seem like it now)keep up your good work xx
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this is a good poem, and still have rooms for improvements,
try using words that are colorful. Broaden your vocabulary so that you could use words better...
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the way this poem does not rhyme, and speaks in short phrases, makes it strong and direct. and i love the line "we can see the world change,/though we do not change with the world." you said "i wish i could have another friend," and that you want people to see you for something other than your exterior. well, i am willing to try.
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