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I Shall Succeed

I have dreams,
I have goals.

I know what I want,
but what I want to be,
I can't be for my parents have no faith.

They don't belive I can do it,
but I know at least two people who do,
me and the most powerful GOD.

Author notes

This is true for me right now but really soon I want have to hear my parents negative thoughts about me wasting my time writing poetry.

What shall i put for the title? Do i need to add something to it?

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  • JOaNnA eLiSe
    December 30, 2008
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    :)

    poetry is amazing .. just like you && this here poem


  • Lightning Struck
    December 29, 2008

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    WEll poetry is not a waste of time, and that is good that you beleive in yourself so much. And yes, You Shall Succeed.

  • Zeprina-Jaz
    December 15, 2008

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    Hahaha!! Very true. Sometimes they just don't understand, but God does. Nice simple poem and powerful

  • SilverWolf
    December 14, 2008

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    Well written Kaylynn. Very well written. The title perfect fits the poem, and your desire to acheive your goals even though you have no support from the two earthly people who [should] have the most influence on you! It just shows how much you wish to acheive your goals. Very well penned.
    It was written from the heart, and thats what really counts.

    Love,
    Abby

  • AngelFace97
    November 30, 2008
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    good writing, thanx for the comment on my animal abuse, i'll go fix that typo

  • kimberlee meredith
    August 31, 2008
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    Very relatable poem, it's good to know others have similar problems.

    "I know what I want,
    but what I want to be,
    I can't be for my parents have no faith."
    -Why is it so easy to believe the negatives things from others, that seem to distort our own views?

    I enjoyed reading this, thank you for posting it.

  • Janenroses
    August 30, 2008

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    Well...

    I think the title, well if I had to chose it, I would have put "To be...", I think that fits more...

  • Lotus-Mama silver member
    August 28, 2008

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    This is great! As cliche as it is, you can be anything you want to be. All you need is to believe in yourself! Others will follow! You owe it to yourself! Pround piece youve wrtitten here!!! Nice job!


  • cats-dont-cry
    August 25, 2008

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    Hey, I went through the exact same thing as you...technically I'm writing poetry, but no one believes it's ever gonna be like, a viable job for the future... Anyway great write and don't be afraid of going after what you love, because hey, all of us here are together in it with you!


  • The Demon Lord
    August 25, 2008
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    Bravo

    Well written friend. Good Work.


  • AnanCat
    August 24, 2008
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    well....nobody can decide another's future.that's right but parents only help their children become better persons and help them find their way..

  • Ken-Maverick
    August 23, 2008

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    Never give up on hope my friend,
    With hope your dreams and goals are one step closer to becoming reality,
    Keep up the writing, and thanks for droppin by
    All the best
    Ken

  • Warrior7
    August 23, 2008

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    Welcome To Allpoetry

    Hi arcanum

    I think you should title this " I Will Succeed"
    I know too well about how you are feeling, my parents were the same with every choice i made in my life, nothing was ever good enough and i just got so tired of their negativity. But i had faith in myself and god and thats what kept me strong to succeed in what i wanted. Great poem. Keep writing

    Andy
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