writing poetry to me is such fun, fun, fun!
sometimes my poems are over before they've begun!
I surely hate to extemporate, or throw in a pun
however, it's hell always to be undone
writing poetry is not just fun, it requires some thinking,
and sometimes it takes a whole lot of drinking
poetry writing to some is rather aggravating
to a select few writing it is invigorating!
Author notes
Author Notes: POW Contest -- Theme: FUN
A contest entry
- Poem of the Week - POW by Arkbear.
1000 points, ended August 25, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Are we having fun yet?
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Hi there,
I admit when I first saw your entry in the PO contest I almost dreaded having to read it because I knew it was going to be a "happy" write...I'm sure that says something about my state of mind at the time.
However...it got a good chuckle from it, and I thank you for that.
I'm sure from my scores you could pretty easily tell what areas I felt were lacking a bit in this. The depth factor is kind of a big one IMO because it affects so many other areas. Also...we put quite a bit of emphasis in the POs on finding unique themes to write about, but that doesn't mean you can't write on an often seen theme...it just makes it that much more of a challenge for you...to approach it differently than anyone else has. Remember...you have a view of the world and writing unlike anyone else...and that's what I'd like to see when I read about a common theme.
Thanks so much for entering the POW. I hope you found it to be a good experience, as I'd love to see you in future POs...it'd be very interesting to see what other themes you might bring us.
Best wishes,
~J.
P.S. My apologies for the late comment.
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Not a very unique take on your prompt, but it was quite fun, although it tended to run, was a little short without much depth to report
Here's my scores.
Title 9.1...I would not click on this Title... I think that it could be more obscure to draw the reader in. I like a tantalizing title.
Flow 9.15....meter is good....but again, too short without a lot of substance.
Depth 9.15....lacking depth, you seemed to skim the surface of this with a little catchy rhyme.
Theme 9.25..overused Theme... not unique and therefore was not overly engaging.
Feelings 9.00...lacking.. more of an amusement ditty.
Grammar 9.3....simple, better verbiage and phrasing would enhance this piece.
Presentation 9.35.... smooth and even.
Uncommonness 9.1 ...well it is an overused theme, so was looking for more creativity here.
Sit & Ponder Affect 9.2... well this scored low in this department for me, because there was really nothing to ponder over, it was straight forward and as I said a theme I have read many times.
Ability to follow Rules 10...perfect
Cupcrazy's Score: 92.6
Nice try!
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lmao! the first two lines had me rolling on the ground
but then it kind of slips downhill from there for me :/ the rest isn't bad at all though. very short as well, I wanted more!!!
Theme - 8.7... not original at all, but still very funny, had me laughing
Flow - 9.3... overall pretty good, could've been better though in the last 6 lines.
Title - 8.5... not original at all.
Rules - 10.
Depth - 9.2... no real depth at all. but there really isn't supposed to be any, this is a light-hearted write.
Thoughts - 9.0... no fresh or interesting thoughts.
Word use - 9.0.... hmmm kind of bland :/
Emotion - 9.7... this poem made me happy and gave me some laughs.
Clarity - 10... straight forward.
Uniqueness - 8.6.... not unique.
total - 92
not a bad score, I hope you come and try again.
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Hi there this was a fun write but I am not a big fan of repeating words and you have done that quite a bit in here I wish that you would of used a better choice of words to get your point across my score will appear at the close of the contest goodluck
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Hi - welcome
Your title is not one I'd click on - too common and vague. Your theme is also common, but you were creative with it - making it a 'fun' write.
Repeating words in this short of a write, cuts the depth and impact...I feel you could have expanded on this, using more lines and images.
It's hard to give a fuller critique on this - due to its length and the fact that, in itself, it is complete....nothing to question or ponder on.
This was an enjoyable, fun write. Best wishes in the contest
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Hi, and welcome to the POW!
This is a cute write, and would probably score well
in any other contest, however, POW has high standards,
and this write falls short in several areas.
You've expressed some of the facets of writing, and
how different people have different methods or
approaches to it. Not an original theme.
I just realized if you replaced "writing poetry" with
"judging poetry", you would have had a more unique
theme, and from my POV, that would be REALLY funny!
I believe 'for' would be more grammatically correct
in line 8, instead of 'to'..also drop the 'it'..not
needed, and makes for awkward flow.
My scores will appear with final remarks. Best to you
in the contest.
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Hello....welocome to the POW Contest!
You know, the best thing about this write, is the charming sense of humor your quill displays ~
Rhyming is forced, but the format you used calls for it....not bad though ~
I enjoyed the transition from one stanza to the next....as you went from Fun.....to...four other areass of interest, which I am sure all of us have indulged in at one time or another......well, maybe not the drinking
There are several other Judges coming behind me....please be patient as we all make our way across your page.....good luck and God bless you!
Bear ~
Title 9.0...I would not want to click on this Title unless I wanted to read about this genre -
Flow 9.95....meter is basically perfect....and very smooth-
Depth 9.7....good depth....wanted more..25 line Max is not used
-Theme 8.85..Theme is common, but your aproach is witty and fun!-
Feelings 9.1...lacking a tad....more emotions than feelings....IMHO -
Grammar 8.9....nice job.....reach deeper next time for unusualness in grammatical choices -
Presentation 9.3....not really a fan of all quatrains...length is quite short -
Uncommonness 9.1...nice....but looking for more creativity -
Sit & Ponder Affect 7.85....not any pondering.....but a nice, witty write -
Ability to follow Rules 10...prefect from what I can tell, except one filler word -
Bears Score: 91.75
Not bad....let's see what your other Judges have to say
No editing once a Judge has touched your work ~
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This I enjoyed Good luck in the contest
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IT CAN BE FUNNY AND HILARIOUS SOMETIMES!
How true this poem, and great rhyme scheme here..Sometimes the poet can have a real easy time of it writing, and other times it is just agony to get what you want to say on paper. Bravo for the write!
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Hehe like the theme. I find writing varies...sometimes its easy and fun and others its like pulling teeth
A wicked write, thanks for sharing and good luck
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