sugar rimmed the glass
the sweetness biting my lips
where your teeth had
pressed
the night before
after rain poured against
my head knocking
my halo off
as I emptied my purse in your
chair searching for
the protection
I never found.
here I am at Magoo’s
you’re rubbing hips
hooked on your belt
my halo dangles
it doesn’t match
your shoes.
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Very solid writing!
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I stumbled upon this poem, but i really like it. There is an uneasy rawness to it i find, which in my experience; those nights feel alot the the same way. Thank god it's all in the past...
Never saw the romance other commentors did, but of course each reader reserves their own interpretation. Great job.
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shouldn't the guy provide the condoms??
lol
I like.
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Oh how I have dearly missed your wicked sense of expression and urban romanticism. very good way to address succumbing to temptation as the halo drops fom the brow to find it clashes with ones shoes anyhow.
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Fun romantic poem!
I really like this sweet poem! It captures my imagination & shows that you are an inspired poet with original ideas and ways to express your emotions and feelings! Very good work! I enjoyed the read! keep up this kind of significant poetry writing!
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My favorite type of poem.
Reevaluating past indiscretions with a sardonic point of view. I like the title but think perhaps Saturday Night Special would work better because of its many connotations, guns, quick shot, danger, etc. Favorite phrases: both have to do with the halo, first knocked off by the circumstantial rain, then dangling (like a scalp) hooked from the belt. I know the feeling, so I collected a few of my own. I have written a few lines on this subject myself. Good job!
Return the favor?
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Oh, sweet! You have a great muse. Keep it first. Shancy.
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WTG Solid
Awesome little bit of poetry angie, you say it all in so little, and let us come along for the ride. I hope post-magoo's was all that you had wanted, and thank you for the insight into all that you are tinking -
Excellent!!!!! pure excellence here
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you're good!! I love this write! You definately have a way with your words. Keep on writing.
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Oh my, sounds like an interesting meeting and damn purses for being hard to find the exact thing you want in a moment's rush
C
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