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Jean's jeans

"These are Jean's jeans, i'll give you a twirl,"
the girl who wore the Calvin Kleins
joked to the boy as she gave him a whirl;
it's a subtle way to show off her legs.

Her hair whips away from her sunburnt face
as she savours the moment of being
'admired'; something not commonplace,
but these jeans have a flattering cut.

When she goes home she'll sneak them back
to her sister's wardrobe; where they belong,
back onto the already full rack,
it's so unfair; she's only got cords.

She regrets the bad pun but not the steal,
cause she's off to the movies friday night
with the boy who watched her dizzily reel
after her spin in Jean's new jeans.

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Option 2, jeans.

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  • Yemassee gold member
    December 12, 2009

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    The rhyming is mature and subtle, the tone amusing, even playful. There is introspection built within, an understanding of character, like:

    "it's a subtle way to show off her legs."

    The poem, like that line is indeed subtle. You are good. I don't say that like the kids her do, at the drop of a hat, and with little honesty, I'm fussy. You are good.


  • luna-midnight silver member
    August 23, 2008
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    hmm this is really intresting, great take on the prompt and good luck
    Stephanie ♥


  • notorious gold member
    August 23, 2008
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    Calvien Klines=Calvin Kleins

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