would you covet my pain
if you knew i cause it all
would you support me
if you knew i wanted to fall
would you hold me
if i could not feel
would you tend my wounds
if i could not let them heal
would you look into my eyes
if only to gaze into an abyss
would you smile upon my face
if only i stared back in emptiness
would you still speak words of love
if i whisper words of hate
would you still be my angel
if i sought only hells gate
would you live for me
if i will not live for myself
would you try to save me
if i willfully destroy my health
would you cry for me
if i left this life of mine
would you forgive me
if i left you behind...........
Author notes
Not written to anyone, just an illusion that once played out im my thoughts once upon a time.
There is no person like this that exists (in my world)
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This is exactly how I feel and exactly what I do.
I let people support me even though I am destined to fall.
Everyone always tells me that in order to get better I got to do it myself.
When all I want and the only reason Im sad is because I dont get their help.
I want them to be there to forgive me, to live for me
Great write. I can really relate.
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I just want people to stop believing in me, and finally accept that I will never be what they imagine, or who I wish I could be.
Im almost completely able to accept what I am, but it hurts in such a pissy, guilty way to fail and disappoint everyone.
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wow, all leading to a fatal ending . beautifully done, again You used the word Abyss in this too! which just makes me think of your ap name, haha... and really different from your newer ones, mushy in a sense.,..
haha... idk
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Well, rotted things tend to get soft and mushy.
The heart is not unlike a fragile fruit after all. -
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ahhah yes, just my point.
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Ha this reminds me of my ex... I wonder if he's lying bleeding and broken in some ditch somewhere.
Nice job..
Ms. Bliss
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Wow, really ?
That's um....kinda funny.
Thanks fior the cookie
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You know it takes a lot of talent to just pluck something like this out of no were. This is really cool.
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It's not talent, becasue it is not really as if I am "inspired" to suddenly write.
After far too long, misery eventually just conscripts me to scribe its laments, and I submit to it, just wanting to try to make it feel better somehow.
But I do appreciate your comments and interest in my writes
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WOW
Original questions. I wonder what the answers were!
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Questions that were never directed to anyone, but if you look down the comments, you will find a little butterfly answered them.
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I just read it! Wow. Do anything to keep a friend like that!!
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I am trying.
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I love the fourth stanza of this piece how it just flows so nicely together. Great write
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Thank you
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i have this poem
read aloud by you 
on my ipod!!!
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to answer your question(s)
first stanza, yes
second stanza, hell yeah!
third stanza, yeah
forth stanza, i love you!
fifth stanza, yes
sixth stanza, yes and i dunno if i could forgive but id understand...if id still be alive to understand...better not leave me!
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This sort of reminds me of this recent episode Oprah, where this woman had to remove both her legs/arms because of this dangerous diease had spread all over her body after having her baby. Her fiance stayed by her side, and eventually married her too.
It was the ideals of love.
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WOW, I know shallow fuckheads who would leave out and leave a woman and the kid on their own!
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I know it's amazing...it really restores my faith in society
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This was my favorite that you wrote! It reminds me so much of my relationship right now! Thanks
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Wow, that's sad.
Good luck with reconciling the resignation and detatchment of that...whoever of the two of you it might be.
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Sort of like testing somebody's love?
I like this :]
It made me think
I reckon thinking's pretty good
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It's more like trying to push away someone good in your life by telling them you don't want their love or their help, and to be left in ruin to rot in hell (a metaphorical, personal hell).
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Very sad. It amazes me that this write wasn't written for anybody. What I like about this write is it kinda leaves you wondering what happend to the person.
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I imagine that there isan answer to that, as this senerio has probabaly played out throughout the ages between amongst lovers and family members.
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woooow
you got me here andrew...very deeeeep and sad
full of emotions and sadness...very well written my friend!
to a dear friend
juliet
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