rain on lilly pads
ripples the moon's reflection,
frog jumps over moon.
A contest entry
- F...is for frog! by DogFish.
400 points, ended August 29, 2008, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The image of rain rippling the surface of a lake or pond, sprinkling over the lilly pads is rather peaceful to me, love the beautiful imagery here.
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Nice one, Di. Congratulations on the silver.
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I love this!
I love the subtlties of a night of rain with its moment of moonlight allowing a humble creature to leap from the marsh into heaven!
I especially love the last line with its wink to our childhood poetry...when all was possible!
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Very visual and well-worded. A pleasure to read.
Good one,
Bill
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SO BEAUTIFULLY PUT!!!!!
It is in our darkest times that we look and reach out for those dreams in the stars.
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Bravo!
The visuals a reader gets are superb! I can see the frog in the moonlight reflected on a pond leaping over the moon and flying threw stars.In present tense and as deeply embued in nature. Just as a great Haiku dictates its intent.
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