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saught



orphaned by the rain


ground


neglected beneath
canopies

of leaves








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  • Lj-
    September 3, 2008
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    Cool take on the prompt.

    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.


  • logorrhoea
    September 1, 2008

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    Your words run in a soft veil.
    I love the doubly effective double meaning of "ground", the way it stands alone.
    Best words.


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    August 30, 2008

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    Wow. This one is... mysterious.

    Reminds me of a scene in "First Knight" when Richard Gere (Sir Lancelot) and Julia Ormond (Guinevere) were resting under a tree's canopy in the pouring rain after he rescued her.

    Still, the word "neglected" seems so dark and empty. Gives this such a mysterious air.

    Great job. Hope to see more from you!!!!

    How are you? I've really missed your presence.


  • Malabu
    August 25, 2008
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    untouched

    becomes me
    by the autumn stir


  • Mallig gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    Wow, such a succinctly powerful and creative interpretation of the prompt, excellent!


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    August 23, 2008
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    simplicity
    with tons of emotion


  • tomisb
    August 23, 2008

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    ah, I would always see shelter and you would see neglect. Like I always tell people facts are facts but the truth is somewhere else.
    Love, Tom B.

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