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Responsibility for Lyrical Art ...

A masterpiece of art, I’d say,
Paints life with words - music for ear.
Potential sigh or eye ballet,
From those too near ...

No sweeter cry could song invoke
From depths, where walls were wearing thin.
With compound eye, each thought a stroke
That’s welcomed in ...

No sweeter tears should bring a frown
To artist who would choose career,
Of turning sadness upside down,
For all to hear ... ...



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Author notes

Word List #8 in order of use:
Responsibility, Art, Say, Life , Music, Potential, Sigh, Cry, Frown Career,

Sapphic Ode in the style of Alexander Pope

Three lines of Iambic Tetrameter followed by a line of Iambic bimeter
(8 syllables three times then 4) rhymed ABAB

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  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    September 12, 2008

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    As Humblpye rightly says art is a responsibility, and you have captured that here. The rhythm of the iambic meter has strengthened that wonderfully. This piece is punchy and carries a message all artists and writers need reminding of once in while.


  • humblpye gold member
    September 10, 2008

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    Hmmm

    Hmmm, hmmm...all art is a responsibility, it's an attempt to seek out, to understand, and ultimately share whatever we have learned...this is a good portrayal of that truth, your choice of words are rich, and rewarding...turning sadness upside down, I like that...regretfully, I am not too well learned in lambic tetrameter etcetarer...guess I'm just an old hippie rambling out my thoughts in no particular order really...Lol I admire and respect your work immensely Joy, I understand what you are saying here, my soul is able to absorb, and interpret things that my head don't necessarily understand sometimes...nice work John


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    August 25, 2008
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    Thank you for your entry, good luck!


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    August 23, 2008

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    Man, I've gotta say that when I finished this, it sure didn' seem like a word-bank poem... the thoughts to fleshed out and logical to have come from a random word bank, let alone in order. Let alone in a particular metrical footing! OK, I'm WOWed!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    Art representing life,
    art interpreting life.
    "...each thought a stroke..."

    Well said.

    Aesthete


  • Patpowers silver member
    August 23, 2008

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    Beautiful!

    Nice work again Joy on sharing your talents in this one. I admire the expression and the movement you conveyed. AWESOME!!


  • Yemassee gold member
    August 23, 2008

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    The beauty of poetry is often ignored in the rush of pretension. What am I saying...not sure, lol No, what I mean is...some worry more about image than substance, and more about prevailing opinion, where that opinion is valid or not....i.e. ...the beauty of lyricism notes.

    "Of turning sadness upside down,"

    I'm probably running wild here but so be it: Some of the most beautiful poems you'll ever read are based on sadness...what's that one by Neruda, "Tonight I Can Write The Saddest Lines," while some of it is a little trite, there's still great beauty there.

    Stop me...I keep meaning to be brief in comments, no one wants to read all my inner dialogue.

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