I swatted the dust off
The ass of my jeans
Vowing never to be knocked
In the dirt again
(at least not by you)
I finally realized that
I don't
I never needed
You
Your pain
I had enough pain already
Thankyouvery much
And I walked away
And never looked back
I finally realized
Pain is not the same as love
And with that realization
I was free to truly love
And I did (do).
A contest entry
- Deux. by notorious.
546 points, ended August 27, 2008, 11 entries
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I struggle to follow it...It doesn't make a whole lot of sense. The flow is very choppy.
I'm not even going to judge this contest. It's been a waste of my points. I'll just let the site mods do it.
So, stay in the contest. You might get 300 points for no reason at all. -
I'm torn.
I love the idea...
Hate the length.
It feels so empty...sort of like a snap-shot when I wanted to watch a movie.
I'll leave you in the contest...
But you'll increase your odds of winning if you throw something a little longer at me. -
thats funny, a terrific write, and good luck in the contest
Stephanie ♥ -
Gal
Perhaps a read for many women of today. Getting knocked around by guys seems to be preferable to being treated nice by some less flambouyant fella.
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LMAO!!!
I feel like your title is part of the poem & the first line is continuing "Never Again".
Hmm. I don't think every line needs to be capitalized--to me, that breaks up the flow--maybe just the beginning of each stanza or no capitalizations at all.
Just a thought.
Good luck
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