what words form this emotion,
this feeling of devotion,
how can I tell you how I feel,
would you believe that this is real;
what would you say,
what would you do,
would you just fade away,
or could you love me too...
just wondering tears me apart,
I knew my feelings from the start,
so much time spent denying this emotion,
afraid to breathe a word, fearing your rejection;
I wander what you would do,
what you would say,
if I told you what I've hidden,
for the last thousand days...
confusion clouds my every thought,
this pain in my heart won't go away,
But I don't think I could take it if you didn't stay,
I couldn't live if you said no and faded away...
A contest entry
- *...>Inlove With My Best Friend by Lislaine.
450 points, ended September 2, 2008, 30 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - silver I by Salty Hibiscus.
450 points, ended February 6, 86 entries
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Are you TRYING to make me cry?
Don't, OK? I don't like crying. It spurs sad thoughts and I cry even more.
But I can definitely relate to this. Definitely. I just want to pour everything out and know how he feels about me, but I'm afraid something will happen. Unfortunately when I did that the first (and only time, so far)...I was shattered into sharp little point pieces.
EXCELLENT job on this write, absolutely fantastical. -
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I love this write, you lied when you said your writes suck... I'm going through this right now... how could you lie to the people in the chatroom like that???
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i can relate
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awesome write. thanks for entering and good luck.
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sometimes i almost think these are about dyllan
im just kidding
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Oh my god. This is about me. Seriously, it is. It's beautifully written, just flows from the tongue. I tried to write something like this only a couple of days ago but it was nowhere near as good as this. I've done this my whole life. Not knowing is torment. I've finally gotten to where I can actually tell people. They're nice. They break it to me gently. They love me just not in the "same way." I'll want to ask them "but why?" There's no good answer why just like there's no good answer I ever fell for them in the first place. Some things just are. Brilliant.
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WOW Another poem that i can so relate to!! I really loved it!!! WOW!! thx for entering and goodluck
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thx for reading and commenting, im always looking for opinions
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*Gasps*
*Gasps* Wow Anubis that is a really deep poem, I have felt that way a lot and i can relate to the feelings. It's because I have been there before and know what's happening. You did an Outstanding Job on writing this poem. Keep up the good work Anubis!
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Loved this!! I can feel your emotions towards de girl. Great write!!
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