The days are getting shorter
and wider
somehow too
I'm living in a world were promises
aren't worth the shortness of breath
or the wasted paper...
I've gotten let down
by you
her
and him
and maybe I'm finally done
I think I'm finally willing to break
today brought promise
today brought you
today i was made w[hole]
today...
well at least i woke up...
Author notes
fri 8/22/08 written-in-ink
depression slowly sets in
i thought that today was going to be better but it wasnt
today brought promise alright
that it wasnt going to get any better
and no this wasnt an attempt at DP so dont judge it that way
i hope you like it...
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Comments
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I do like it actually...my favourite was
I'm living in a world were promises
aren't worth the shortness of breath
or the wasted paper...
Great write, good luck in the contest!
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I know what it feels like to have people let you down, the most important people in your life. It hurts more if there's more than one too, as you think for a second it might be something to do with you, not them.
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The days are getting shorter
and wider
somehow too
I'm living in a world were promises
aren't worth the shortness of breath
or the wasted paper...
today...
well at least i woke up...
LOVED those parts.
your writing shows major growth
even just on this site.
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alright
soemthing told me you would like this one
hahahah
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great write.
love this:
"today brought promise
today brought you
today i was made w[hole]
today...
well at least i woke up..."
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aww thank you!
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this was really good!
I'm living in a world were promises
aren't worth the shortness of breath
or the wasted paper...
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i loved that part sooo much
the imagery and emotions are just WOW.
and maybe I'm finally done
I think I'm finally willing to break
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i think thats wonderful..how you're willing to break cause usually it would be how im willing to stay strong or something. so this was really unique and i really liked it :]
today i was made w[hole] <-- i like the w[hole] its like a double meaning..wonderful idea
and the ending is brilliant i love it soo soo much
best of luck in the contest <33 -
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awww
your comments always make me smile!!! -
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yaaay im glad
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awww wow, *hugs* this is a great write,kinda sad
but great job and good luck
Stephanie ♥ -
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aww thank you very much
i feared that it was horrible...
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