Lying behind simplicity is a web of lies we feed upon
I have seen many friends lead a simple life
They are fraught with problems just like the rest of us
In ten easy steps a person can simplify there life
Life walks in the door,says "I'm back and guess what?
The doctor's say no stress it makes your illness worst
Then the first bomb hits a friends dies around Christmas
Another one around last day of January then May 12th my husband dies
The day of his funeral is funds were garnished
Even now I could write ten pages of problems they just keep coming and coming
Author notes
if it not was for meditation i would not be sane two weeks after my husband death my brother died in August, our neighbor has gotten very ill too many others to bore you with i tried to live a simple life it just gets away from me
A contest entry
- Questionable Prompts IV by B Chandler.
500 points, ended August 23, 2008, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
excellent~
I know you must be overwhelmed here at this moment still...
Life indeed is not easy by any means...but you shared with us heartfelt and poignant emotions and a poem here with us as well
It may seem to you like a molten lava volcano getting ready to erupt and burst....
Just hang in there sis...time heals all wounds...tho this may take time indeed..just don't ever give up
You have a wonderful heart and soul...
Congrats on the Bronze Trophy as well
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
-
Life can be hard there is no doubt about that, but you seem to have come through it and still be able to put pen to paper, so please see that as a victory. There were a few spelling errors in this but it was from the heart and there is nothing better. Best to you
-
Brenda,
You did a great job on the simplicity with deep inner feelings running rampant in this one! I know it seems like life is going to get away with taking over, but remember, pick yourself up, dust yourself off, and whisper a quiet prayer for strength and you will be fine. you did a great job on this one!
Congrats on the well deserved Bronze.
and love
Nyetta
-
Simplicity is not all it is thought to be, the complexity of simplicity is killing me. This is what came to mind as I read this. You have had an avalanch of loss and misfortune, the fact that you are still out there on your own two feet speaks much about your character and inner strength. May God continue to supply your needs and see you through your season of grief and loss. Better days ARE ahead!
Dennis
-
-
You're over just a wee bit; shorten the lines up. A trick for that is to use metaphorical phrases in shortened lines
-
-
I am not sure what metaphorical phrases are I am very visual so it hard for me to write I love the written word. I was so suprised by the bronze this has been not very good two. My brother died and a husband life seems mot real. If you could explain it to me so I can get the idea of it.
thank you
brenda
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
