these feelings have
just taken hold
waking to find
the future has
taken over and
vending machine love
rules the world
and we are only
products of this
insane and weird
new way of living
oh no this can't be
it's a revolt of
darkest kind the
vending machine
has lost it's mind
and now it's shooting
its wares at us
as we try to run away
Author notes
20-40 words
30 minutes to write
Prompt # 2:
"Imagined the future,
woke up with a scream.
I was buying some feelings
from a vending machine."
- The Verve
A contest entry
- A Mango Smoothie Quickie.... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended August 23, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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The sour and southward turn of contemporary american values is certainly scary and cold. Ya might consider further developing the imagery behind the concept being conveyed. Could there be a "mass recall" on those "products"? LOL Enjoyed.
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Short sweet and damn deep. The last 3 lines are too true. I can acually picture some random person just sticking in the dollar
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Sad..some people look for love desperately. Everybody needs love, but it finds you. Some people just force it and it turns out wrong. Thanks for sharing this, it's really deep
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This is a very interesting take on the prompt, taking a unique direction. Clever way to pen the straightforwardness of the 'vending machine'. Best wishes in the contest!
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Thank you for such a wonderful comment. good luck to you too.
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An excellent way to present your poem. Best of luck!
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thank you.
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well done with your take on the prompt!
best of luck
Tasha
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ty you too.
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I can see this as a part of a song .. has such a nice flow and inviting imagery ... Best of luck to you.
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ty
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this is a great poem .. wow.. "vending machine love" excellent
good luck
kat
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I think we're almost at that stage too!!! Definitely fitting for the prompt! Excellent take!
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WOw... I don't wanna wake to that.
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me either...
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Well done! "Vending Machine love..."
for blue pills 
Nicely penned... best of luck...
Ken
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