Waiting for my life to open into the light,
Hoping by some miracle, I will survive.
Beneath the snow lies your heart,
cold, empty, but I know you hear me.
(I can hear you call my name)
Say goodbye, to all things that pain you,
say goodnight, to all things that trouble you.
I know you are afraid,
(Again your voice screams my name)
Say goodnight, don't be afraid now.
Say goodbye, I'll come after you.
I love you.
Calling my name,
Screaming my name.
You
Fade
To
Black...
Author notes
As you may be able to tell...this is about a suicide. This happens more than people think, and I just wish I could have told them that I loved them. I wish I didn't have regret. I wish he were still here.....Hope this is what you were looking for...
A contest entry
- Anorexia, Bullimic, Self harm? State your feelings! by Lsh-x.
475 points, ended October 2, 2008, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dark, cutting, suicide, sadness, depression by stargardt13.
700 points, ended February 28, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - darkside by emoempess.
700 points, ended May 16, 201 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? Anything I can work on?
Comments
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I loved the intesity. I am so sorry for your lose. Death is a terrible thing, along with sucide. I relate to this so well. This poem was beautiful. Thank you so much for sharing this with me and entering it in my contest. I truley loved this poem.
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Wow, the way this is set out, is powerful!
You have an intense piece here, well done. x
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