a morning sun shines
on those frigid yesterdays
to grant victory
sharp ache departs heart
and shivers soul no longer
with severe longing
loneliness fades far
with vision keen to future
as wait is shrinking
grace consumes spirit
as her touch is imminent
to clasp eagerness
true faith grows stronger
to replace ever silence
echoed by absence
A contest entry
- Invite Only! by Age of Rain.
1750 points, ended September 11, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Beautiful form and meaning...love for another makes everything so much softer in life and your words say it all...
Lovely imagery and flow...
Lovely!
mystic
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An absolutely BEAUTIFUL tribute to your love. What a lovely chain haiku to capture gorgeous emotions and imagery. Your ending was quite powerful as well.
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This is beautiful and soon it will be your love that will be shared will be a beautiful gift that will last a lifetime
you
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this is good, i like it.
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Absolutely beautiful brother dear. I'm sure your love will be deeply touched by this. Best of luck my friend.
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A great entry into this contest. You really show your feelings in this one. Beautifully done.
Good luck in the contest.
Nor
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Thank you.
I just emailed this to her...
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I love this.. I know what this one is about. you've captured the emotions so brilliantly in this piece. WOW.. this to me is perfect..
you're right soon, soon you'll be together.. that brings a smile to me and to my heart..
this is a very beautiful poem..
good luck in the contest.
kat
s x eternity
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I want pancakes.
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I had blueberry pancakes at work today.
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Made by your Satanic chef hands?
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I don't know about satanic.. but yeah I made them. lol
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I'm only capable of pouring myself cereal.
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That can't be true. lol
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It is. Never boiled water in my life.
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King Eggo-
Oh God I can't think of shit to write for that contest...I forgot about that contest...arghs!!!
"frigid yesterdays/to grant victory"
I love the way you used 'frigid'. It makes me think of ponies riding with I dunno, Napoleon sitting on one.
"as wait is shrinking"
This is neatO.
Me loves the word 'clasp'.
"to replace ever silence"
That 'ever' is so bloody pretentious!! LoL but I don't mind it.
"echoed by absence"
'absence' & 'silence' could be synonyms, but not QUITE.
LOOOOVE the word 'echo' & all its derivatives...
Jessica
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Thank you.
Each stanza is 5-7-5 btw.
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I didn't notice that
Such surgical precision
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