a whisper in the night,
faint breath in your ear,
you shiver, but don't know why,
you have no idea I am near,
I am your whisper in the dark,
your palpitations hard and fast,
and you know that you want me,
but not if we will last
it doesn't matter anyhow
I am in your ear, your gentle whisper
Please tell me what you think
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Lovely
And Ido love whispers in the dark. Great art it sets the mood.
Whisper
Whisper me a tune
softly sing to me
soften my pillow
warm my sheets
whisper me a tune
I can dream on
whisper something wonderful
next to my ear
let me taste your breath
just whisper me a tune
to tuck me in
rock me to sleep
eyelids against my cheek
lips touching my ear
hair tickling my face
so sofly whisper something
anything
just so I can sleep
no more lonely nights
no more ceiling lights
no more sleep walking in you
whisper me tune
let me brush your hair again
whisper something I can dream on
something I can hold on to
softly sing your song
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very beautiful write.Nicely done.
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Is that you? You're beautiful, if it is.
But I don't know why I am asking, after reading
the poem, but still, I thought I would ask.
"but you don't how we will last" - I think you need a "know" in there...Though you just used the word in the line before...But I thought I would mention it.
I loved that last line. If everything worked as perfect as a whisper sometimes.
A fine piece of personal writing.
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Aw thank you, that's me. Thank you for the comment, I did omit a word, I reworked the line a little so hopefully it flows better.
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Now it's much better, not that it was bad to begin with.
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thank you
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