I'll use tonight as 'excuse for a hiss...through this tweeter built-in speakers, through a 'hall surrounding types (soundly missed), 'ear in their own time. It's an exercise,
impatience. To realise weight of found temptations; 'considerance' (medium's body). Beats are alive and doing well; what can I say (that you haven't he'rd before) called...
you imagined it. The Abyss. Hyped in letters. Deciphered differently according to the scribe who's-a-hit! (in histories hip' scene) At *his height of a glittering career in racketeering. [*or Ms]
Socially steering (collective schools for fearing) misunderstanding; shapes much sharper than a gun-shot ripping air. This I declare as ricochet...note of disclaimer: it wasn't me. *ring-ring* Phone The Police!
I wasn't there on the day-back in the day. Truth be denied, (untold) was never fair, never tidy. Where's seek t' hide gone, disappeared? Passed away. Labeled by some deaf&dumb' neglectfully,
buried. Was it suicide? This is not right. These words you see say nothing like I mean. I'm outta here, dig? Before I 'join-in, SING! It's Just A Jazz Thing...Not morbid et al, on a scale of swing
Author notes
bassline retort/list'(n)ing for echoes
http://www.sendspace.com/file/grnvrt
(written to be read<->as it's spoken)
A contest entry
- JAZZ AGE BEAUTIES by Godless but divine.
1000 points, ended August 31, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
tell me exactly what you think; no holds barred!
Comments
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I really like this poem! I like your choice of words!!!
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My apologies for taking so long to comment, but i have to admit that though I had to read it several times and though your choice of words or rather the manner you say things is intriguing and very compelling(This I declare as ricochet...note of disclaimer: it wasn't me. *ring-ring*), It has taken me awhile to fully grasp the context of your poem. well done, and good luck.
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no worries (altho' I was beginning to wonder, as everyone else has had a judge's comment!)
I think I understand; it's abstract, so *perhaps (in my mind meaning *hopefully) meanings are *mutable, as a result?
(*not exactly 'changeable', more 'room to grow'---to me, this is about battling/living with forms of superiority in the music scene...my own included)
anyway, I'm really glad you said "your choice of words or rather the manner you say things is intriguing and very compelling" because that's what it's all about, to me
thanks for that, and for your attention
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Nice flow, this moves quickly and really carries the reader through. There are some great images and phrasing here that make this a worthy read. Good luck in the contest.
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thanks, jazzcat
I'm *tempted to do a mixtape to go (with the flow), and to show some love for NU-JAZZ
[*edit/so I just did; the link's in the notes]
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back in the day, truth be denied, was never fair
on a scale of swing, 11/10
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you know it, sister
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"This is not right. These words you see say nothing like I mean. I'm outta here, but before I do, sing! It's Just A Jazz Thing...Not morbid et al, but a scale of swing."
You not only walk the walk poet... you talk the talk. Thanks for taking the reader for a walk on the dancefloor.
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you're welcome...but you know, it's always in progress
*leadfoot*
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