You act like it's nothing
A missed call or no texts
But to me, you're my world
And there's nothing left
You say you're falling
For me so fast
But somehow you don't show it
I don't know if it'll last
You say you don't show it
You're not romantic at all
But when I need you most
All I get is a brick wall
I love you, you know that
And I know you love me too
But I question us
Will we get through
The tears keep coming
And I'm tired of cries
So tell me what you feel
Don't tell me the lies
Actions surpass
Words left behind
Actions show
The thoughts of the mind
You know what to say
Your words mean so much
But you actions are lacking
Lacking a sweet touch
Your words bring a smile
To my face
But words aren't as good as
Your sweet embrace
So please show me
The love in your heart
Through actions and words
Because I hate being apart
A contest entry
- Love and Loss by LilEmoPrincess.
550 points, ended December 23, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I can't believe I'm doing this again Part Deux by NoUseForAName.
700 points, ended December 31, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Be honest, be brutal, be totally true, and tell me what you think
Comments
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Humm..very intimate sharing you did here while at the depth of your soul..very touching work indeed..thanks for the work shared...
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this piece was heartwrenching and honest- and truly beautiful write. but i'm afraid i'm going to have to remove it from my contests- it is nothing like what i'm looking for. but if you have something more to my tastes feel free to submit. again so sorry, take care and keep up the good work. -T
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I need the describtion of waht its based on in the Authers notes not there in 2 days DQ
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Relationships can be a hard thing at times, especially if you are going through some storms
You presented that well here, with honest emotions
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Beautiful, I loved it so much. I think you should keep writing like this. You could publish a book of poems.
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Guys are rats [no offense to any guy that happens to read this!] But they always puzzle us, don't they? Makes you wonder what goes on in those little brains of theirs. I clearly understood the emotion and meaning of this poem. The only thing is that the rhythm was a bit irregular. But great job on a great poem!
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aww chica this was so awesome, full of emotion and love/sadness
You write with such passion, it goes so deep, as always. I hope things work out, you always seem to have problems with guys, is this the same guy? Keep it up!
Love!!
~Michaela~
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I love it. It's so deep and it's awesome! Please be sure to check out some of my work too. Comment and applaud. This poem is crazy good!
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