restless intentions compel to deface,
beauty weaved by refined grace.
As aromatic notes twisted & curved,
poetry violent & in cruelty versed,
rage against the dull & vain;
Tainted elegance & savage prose,
inflicted upon my withered rose,
adorn our madness.
Thorns uncleansed, a mattress compose,
as blood merges from shredded clothes.
While sultry wine, & scented ink,
carved upon skin lavish & pink,
trace a path of carnal sin;
Innocence is lost in passion’s gale.
Thus ruptured flesh & ravaged veil,
desecrate our body & soul.
Author notes
prompt #1 ,picture inspired.("Self-destruction" from Photobucket.com)
A contest entry
- Self-Destruction - choose your prompt! by Auburn Sunrise.
1000 points, ended August 29, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This may be out of context, if so let me know and I will remove it from the contest.
Comments
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Great write i love this style of writing.
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Ah, a most lyrical, strange and oddly wonderful poem here, which has this spell to lull the reader into a kind of subtle hypnosis! It all words so well with your meter and rhyme... bravo... bravo.
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Wow this is so intense. I really enjoyed it and I'm in one of those self destructive moods right now. This was the perfect read for me! Thanks!!!
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"""adorn our madness.""" =) i love this line!! great poem. not cheesey or anything. very delightful. Good job.
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That was absolutely Ah-Mazing!
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I really enjoyed the piece, but I wish you had written out and instead of using the ampersand (&), I feel it takes away from the mood.
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I love it this is truly an amazing write!! You did an incredible job!! This is so well written!! Every word and every line is perfect!! I love it!!
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Oh I absolutely love this.
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I really loved this.. The flow was nice and smooth and the imagery was really vivid and detailed as well.. You did a wonderful job!! thank you very much for sharing..
Angel
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Great lines and phrases.
I'm impressed with your use of diction. The entire poem has unstoppable velocity and is so ... catchy and rhythmic - like a song you can't get out of your head but absolutely love it being there.
Somewhat reminds me of a cross somewhere between Seether, Blue October and Shinedown (all three have impressive rhythms and such poetic lyrics).
Excellent entry!!! Definitely works for that pic. -
I like your take on the prompt, and the rhyme is interesting and uncommon, which makes it much less awkward.
Great job,
Cadence
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I love how this flows. Great write
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Great write. Good use of words and flow. Keep it up.
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Fantastic
I'm in amazement with this poem. It's clear you are extremely talented.
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