Exposed am I
In a dark dank street,
Spinning around
With dyslexic feelings,
Unknowns, massage my innards
An unclear confusion
Apprehension clearly calls.
A fleeting glimpse
Of a special warmth
Dangles perched,
Elusive unsure,
Saying much with a silence
The unfathomable expression.
The illusion of contentment
Taunts gleeful with a song,
Ribald indecision
Selflessly claims the blame.
Lost am I in this world
Without clarity,
Peering within from outside
Nose pressed to the window,
My hesitant inept breath seeks solace
Merely concealing the stunning view.
22/08/08
Author notes
breath by *Illu-sab = http://illu-sab.deviantart.com/art/breath-71803053
A contest entry
- You by Demington.
850 points, ended September 3, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. That was absolutely incredible, dad. Where have you been? I haven't seen you around in a while. Hope all is well.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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The poem fits nicely with the picture you used.
I like the stark brevity of your writing.
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thank you for your kind comment and for the HM
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Boy a raw harsh reality wake up call you have etched here!
Powerful words lost in thought that reaps in each stanza
Wish you all the best in the contest
J
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